ST2D SIN Cover Letter Correction
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Hello everyone,
I would need your help to correct my cover letter :)
and possibly suggest modifications because I find it quite long :s
Thank you!
::> Currently in the final year of ST2D with a specialization in SIN, I am completing my final year and preparing for my baccalaureate. I would like to join your school to complete my initial training and acquire the necessary foundations for a career as an engineer.
Reputed for its seriousness, your school offers a quality education that is well recognized by both its graduates and employers. Furthermore, the courses in Computer Science and Mathematics seem particularly well suited to my aspirations and, consequently, to my career plans.
After meeting students and professors at fairs to clarify and specify my choice, the professional training program you offer perfectly matches my expectations in terms of knowledge and skill development. Indeed, since my childhood, I have always been attracted to technology and art, thus I have gained knowledge in these areas, particularly in computing and in the arts. Absolutely convinced that I have found the ideal training to achieve my professional project, I am sending you my application, hoping that it will receive the welcome I anticipate.
I remain at your disposal for any further information regarding my application or for an initial interview.
In the meantime, please accept, Madam, Sir, my distinguished salutations.
I would need your help to correct my cover letter :)
and possibly suggest modifications because I find it quite long :s
Thank you!
::> Currently in the final year of ST2D with a specialization in SIN, I am completing my final year and preparing for my baccalaureate. I would like to join your school to complete my initial training and acquire the necessary foundations for a career as an engineer.
Reputed for its seriousness, your school offers a quality education that is well recognized by both its graduates and employers. Furthermore, the courses in Computer Science and Mathematics seem particularly well suited to my aspirations and, consequently, to my career plans.
After meeting students and professors at fairs to clarify and specify my choice, the professional training program you offer perfectly matches my expectations in terms of knowledge and skill development. Indeed, since my childhood, I have always been attracted to technology and art, thus I have gained knowledge in these areas, particularly in computing and in the arts. Absolutely convinced that I have found the ideal training to achieve my professional project, I am sending you my application, hoping that it will receive the welcome I anticipate.
I remain at your disposal for any further information regarding my application or for an initial interview.
In the meantime, please accept, Madam, Sir, my distinguished salutations.
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A cover letter always consists of three main paragraphs. Whether it's for a job search or simply to motivate a request for training or studies.
When it comes to a cover letter to express your interest in joining a specific training program:
The first paragraph aims to grab the reader's attention in a few lines. It should be brief and concise: 4 or 5 lines should suffice and should encourage the reader to continue reading your letter. You should state in a few words why you are sending this letter, and align your last completed training with the one you wish to join, or in the case of a career change, explain your desire to switch paths.
The second paragraph should be more explanatory, where you talk about yourself. You discuss your most recent training or trainings, what it brought you, and the knowledge you gained. The goal here is to present yourself and demonstrate that this request directly fits into your curriculum or at least aligns with your future professional project.
In the third paragraph, you outline your qualities, relate them to the training you wish to join, and explain what you could contribute to this program through your presence, your additional knowledge, etc.
I found quite a few examples of cover letters for training on this website:
http://lettre-de-motivation.modele-cv-lettre.com/recherche-lettre-motivation-formation.php
Of course, you will never find THE letter to copy. The ideal cover letter does not exist, don't dream!
However, these models of cover letters are a source of inspiration; draw from the sentence structures, the adjectives used, the polite phrases or introductions... For the rest, it's up to you to play!
When it comes to a cover letter to express your interest in joining a specific training program:
The first paragraph aims to grab the reader's attention in a few lines. It should be brief and concise: 4 or 5 lines should suffice and should encourage the reader to continue reading your letter. You should state in a few words why you are sending this letter, and align your last completed training with the one you wish to join, or in the case of a career change, explain your desire to switch paths.
The second paragraph should be more explanatory, where you talk about yourself. You discuss your most recent training or trainings, what it brought you, and the knowledge you gained. The goal here is to present yourself and demonstrate that this request directly fits into your curriculum or at least aligns with your future professional project.
In the third paragraph, you outline your qualities, relate them to the training you wish to join, and explain what you could contribute to this program through your presence, your additional knowledge, etc.
I found quite a few examples of cover letters for training on this website:
http://lettre-de-motivation.modele-cv-lettre.com/recherche-lettre-motivation-formation.php
Of course, you will never find THE letter to copy. The ideal cover letter does not exist, don't dream!
However, these models of cover letters are a source of inspiration; draw from the sentence structures, the adjectives used, the polite phrases or introductions... For the rest, it's up to you to play!
I'm not very skilled at this, but here goes:
Currently *2 repetition => I think you can greatly synthesize this first paragraph:
Currently in my final year of high school, I am preparing to obtain my ST2D baccalaureate with a specialization in SIN.
Maybe a few adjustments too:
Reputed to be serious, I would like to join your school to complement my initial training and to acquire the necessary foundations for a career in engineering. Your school offers quality education that is well recognized by both graduates and employers. Furthermore, the computer science and mathematics courses seem particularly suited to my aspirations and therefore to my career plans.
There you go :-)
Currently *2 repetition => I think you can greatly synthesize this first paragraph:
Currently in my final year of high school, I am preparing to obtain my ST2D baccalaureate with a specialization in SIN.
Maybe a few adjustments too:
Reputed to be serious, I would like to join your school to complement my initial training and to acquire the necessary foundations for a career in engineering. Your school offers quality education that is well recognized by both graduates and employers. Furthermore, the computer science and mathematics courses seem particularly suited to my aspirations and therefore to my career plans.
There you go :-)