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Raymond PENTIER Posted messages 58213 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   -
Hello,
I don't know where to post this, but I would like you to help me correct the mistakes
I was told during an interview that there were mistakes, but I don’t see which ones

The mission you wish to assign to your future Secretariat convinced me to submit my application.

I have acquired, as part of my training in Professional Baccalaureate Secretariat, a perfect mastery of the administrative field: mail entry, switchboard management, use of Word, Excel, Access, and various software.

Dynamic and motivated, I learned during my several weeks of internship in the company the listening skills necessary for this position.

I remain at your disposal for any further information and I ask you to accept, Madam, the expression of my distinguished salutations.

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    transat Posted messages 31956 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   9 021
     
    Hello
    The mission you wish to assign to your future Secretary has convinced me to submit my application.

    I have acquired, during my training in the Professional Baccalaureate in Secretarial Studies, a perfect mastery of the administrative field: typing correspondence, managing the switchboard, using Word, Excel, Access and various software.

    Dynamic and motivated, I have assimilated the listening skills required for this position during my several weeks of internship in a company.

    I remain at your disposal for any further information and I ask you, Madam, to accept my highest regards.
    mastery----maîtrise
    future------futur
    necessary---nécessaires
    asked-------prie
    I only point out spelling mistakes and not the way of writing this letter
    @+

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    1. Vaucluse Posted messages 27336 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   6 453
       
      If I may say so, Transat, the "e" goes to "convaincu," not to "futur," which relates to the secretariat.
      best regards
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    2. transat Posted messages 31956 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   9 021
       
      You are right. As for the bold letters, those are the mistakes I noticed. And I have included the corrections at the end of my response
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    3. Vaucluse Posted messages 27336 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   6 453
       
      Exactly, I misread the initial message. Sorry. But I still stand by my convictione
      Best regards
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  2. Vaucluse Posted messages 27336 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   6 453
     
    Good evening
    and since it seems that Marie (what a beautiful name) is feminine, and that the rules of agreement with the verb avoir haven't changed since my tender childhood, I also suggest writing:
    ....your future secretariat has convinced me
    me being a direct object complement placed before the verb.
    kind regards
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  3. Raymond PENTIER Posted messages 58213 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   17 482
     
    ... and "... your future secretary " would be more appropriate than "... your future secretariat " ...
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  4. pikouik Posted messages 1077 Status Member 498
     
    I would have made these changes:

    The mission you wish to entrust to your future secretarial position convinced me to submit my application.

    Through my training in Professional Baccalaureate Secretarial, I have gained a perfect mastery of the administrative field: mail entry, switchboard management, and the use of Word, Excel, Access, and various software.

    Dynamic and motivated, I have assimilated the listening skills necessary for this position during several weeks of internship in a company.

    I remain at your disposal for any further information and I kindly ask you to accept, Madam, the expression of my distinguished salutations.
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  6. transat Posted messages 31956 Registration date   Status Contributor Last intervention   9 021
     
    Good evening Vaucluse
    I also asked myself the same question :-))
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