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Céline
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Bonjour, enfaite je suis en 3ème et j'ai un exposé en Anglais a faire je l'ai finie mais je recherche une personne qualifié pour me dire si le texte est bien rédigé et si je ne dit pas n'importe quoi . Mon exposé est sur l'enfant bleu une association pour les enfants maltraités si quelqu'un peut m'aider je lui montrerais mon texte merci beaucoup pour les personnes qui se donneront la peine de m'aider . Merci
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Bonjour Céline,
Je pourrais jeter un coup d’œil a votre texte et vous donner mon avis.
Cdt,-
Merci beaucoup de vous donnez la peine de me répondre voici le texte
L’Enfant Bleu:
L’Enfant bleu has been an association for helped the children brutalize for them enable to the rebuilding physically and morally.
The history for the association:
L’Enfant bleu has created since 1989 by the Lady Lorene Russel because she was brutalizing by his family. L’Enfant bleu have 2 psychologists 1 jurist 1 assistance of direction and 1 responsible of communication. In the office they have had a president Eric Cannamela 1 secretary Michel Martzloff and a treasurer Jean-Claude Danard.
What are they doing?
Their missions
Forewarn the brutalize
Protect the children
Their actions beside a victim
Listen and support the children
Defend some rights of children
Their localization
L’Enfant bleu has located in Maubeuge, Saint die, Lyon, Grenoble and Toulouse.
Conclusion:
The association has been essential for the security some children it’s reason to which I’m select L’Enfant bleu just as the association.
Encore merci ps: je doit utiliser du present perfect . Merci- Voici en gras les remarques correspondantes :
Ps : Un autre avis est conseillé (Peut-être que j'ai zappé quelque chose).
L’Enfant bleu has been an association that helped the brutalized children for them to be able to rebuild physically and morally.
The history of the association:
L’Enfant bleu has been created since 1989 by the Lady Lorene Russel because she was brutalized by her family. L’Enfant bleu have 2 psychologists 1 jurist 1 executive assistant and 1 communication manager. In the office they have had a president : Eric Cannamela, 1 secretary : Michel Martzloff and a treasurer : Jean-Claude Danard.
What are they doing?
Their missions
Forewarn the brutality
Protect the children
Taking nearby the victims
Listen and support the children
Defend the rights of children
Their localization
L’Enfant bleu has been located in Maubeuge, Saint die, Lyon, Grenoble and Toulouse.
Conclusion:
The association has been essential for the security of some children reason why i select L’Enfant bleu just as an association.
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L’Enfant bleu has been an association that helped the brutalized children to be able to rebuild themself physically and morally.
The association history.
L’Enfant bleu has been established in 1989 by Lady Lorene Russell because she was herself brutalized by her family.. L’Enfant bleu have 2 psychologists 1 jurist 1 executive assistant and 1 communication manager. In the office there is a president : Eric Cannamela, 1 secretary : Michel Martzloff and a treasurer : Jean-Claude Danard.
What are they doing?
Their missions:
Prevent the brutality
Protect the children
Their actions biside victims:
Listen and support the children
Defend the rights of children
Its localization:
L’Enfant bleu has been located in Maubeuge, Saint Die, Lyon, Grenoble and Toulouse.
Conclusion:
This association has been essential for the savety of children, reason why i just select the association L’Enfant bleu .
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